Writing 101

To the Editors at the Globe & Mail:

Please pay attention to the construction of paragraphs. Generally speaking, they are intended to express a particular theme or impart a piece of information. If there is more than one separate concept included, the meaning is obscured. Today’s example from the story regarding the shootings in Alabama:

Among others injured was a state trooper injured by broken glass after Mr. McLendon shot his cruiser seven times. The injured infant was taken to Wiregrass Medical Center in Geneva before being flown to another hospital, Wiregrass administrator John Rainey said.

Am I to understand that the Alabama State Troopers are in the habit of hiring infants? How do they see over the dashboards of the police cruisers?

Not to make light of the topic (much), but come on, a second-grader could do better than that.


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